New wordle words from The Sunday Whirl:
jasmine, demons, window, scrap,
ample, montage, flawed, granite,
trapped, whistle, domain, sunset
Midnight Montage
Long after sunset, Stygian
darkness shrouds the night,
howling demons dance
in tangled gardens,
snarled jasmine vines creep up
the trellis outside her window,
scraps of flawed moonlight
tarnish dew-drenched grass.
Trapped in the turret of her granite
domain, alone and vulnerable,
she awaits the arrival of dawn.
14 comments:
Nicely ominous!
Ooooo.... I hope she stayed safe. Those demons get everywhere ;)
I just love this, especially:
snarled jasmine vines creep up
the trellis outside her window,
scraps of flawed moonlight
tarnish dew-drenched grass
Rapunzel creeps up in me as I read this.... Your imagery is rich. I love the same part Laurie does. Brava, Marianne!
That's thirds on the snarled jasmine vines and what follows. Also agree on the Rapunzel comment. Good flow to your story.
Elizabeth
the 'stygian dark of night' gave me shivers.....a bit scary, and so well-written.....one of the best yet
Marianne, I love same part as the others.
"snarled jasmine vines creep up
the trellis outside her window,
scraps of flawed moonlight
tarnish dew-drenched grass"
That is quite good imagery!
Pamela
You used the wordle words so effectively to help the reader picture the scene. She definitely does not have a happy life, and I hope when dawn comes it brings her release and happiness.
"Trapped in her granite domain,
alone and vulnerable,
she awaits the arrival of dawn"
I love the solitude in this...
I am noticing your penchant for mood pieces, Marianne.
Oh! Those last three lines! So good!
~Paula
Very visual and strongly tied together. :)
I hope dawn brings safety, peace, release from the scary night of everything creepy. Well done.
A story waiting for a background and an ending...plus some inbetweening! I had to look up stygian! I really enjoy learning from my Wordler friends. So glad you enjoyed 'Crust' that was my second offering...If you have time you might also enjoy:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/06/sw-62-rm-mm-3-just-peachy.html
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