Brenda selected 12 awesome words from Mike Patrick's poetry for this week's wordle:
gutter * flickering * twitched * vanished
crooked * bottle * caught * bloody
gurgle * sidewalk * thump * carved
The Time Of Samhain
It was the time of year
when darkness came early,
crooked sky tumbling
down thick and black,
like coagulated blood
smearing every small,
out-of-the-way corner
of the neighborhood.
Sprawled on the sidewalk
in front of Frankie's place,
no longer boys, not quite men,
they drank from a brown-bagged
bottle of fierce, fiery poison.
Eerie whisperings charged
the carved silence. Strange
flickering things thumped
and twitched in the gutter,
gurgled, then vanished. Through
his whiskey-induced haze, Frankie
wondered if they would be next.
Notes:
Samhain (pronounced Sah-ween) is a Gaelic festival held October 31–November 1, dedicated to the harvest and the dead. It is seen as a celebration of darkness.
14 comments:
Ah, yes... those whiskey-induced hazes can be spooky.
This is rich dark chocolate spiced with cayenne. :) I especially love "crooked sky tumbling / down thick and black / like coagulated blood..."
Oooo nasty. Scary, very fitting for Halloween :)
Oh, you have set the scene here so well, Marianne. Dark and deep. And I was glad to learn a bit about Sanhain.
Thanks for the notes about the festival. I like the ending much, which is delicious with suspense.
A nice picture painted of that time of the year!!
"no longer boys, not yet men," a nice way to describe teenagers!!
Very well done... I loved the crooked sky!
This wordle brought out your inner wordsmith. Beautifully crafted. I had never heard of Samhain before, but it is a wonderful fit for those words.
Marianne, yes, I love this... quite befitting for all hallow's eve.
Pamela
Wonderful suspense and very vivid imagery. Thanks for the notes on the festival.
Elizabeth
Suspenseful and thrilling...
innards
A wonderful poem. So much imagery, I think my favourite has to be - "they drank from a brown-bagged bottle of fierce, fiery poison."
A great read. Thanks.
time for Halloween, Glad that is is over.
best wishes.
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