New wordle words from Brenda and The Sunday Whirl:
bluffs, willow, corona, brush,
trembled, mud, crawl, vessels,
nail, stain, shadows, stones
Alone
A little before dawn when
the sky goes black to gray,
weeping willows tremble,
whisper low, sad sounds,
ink-stained shadows
crawl over craggy bluffs,
corona glow brushes the moon.
Alone in the phantom pale,
she cries and cries.
14 comments:
So few words blending into a wonderful write. Favorite line, "A little before dawn when the sky goes black to gray..."
I love your economical way with the Wordle words. You've made a beautiful poem.
Yes, I become a trio of comments that went before. So compact - so intense - so very beautiful :)
Awww... so much said in so few words but so sad. Deep and lovely.
So melancholy - appeals to my innate drama queen and my own sense of aloneness. Beautifully done.
This tugs at my heart. The scene you painted with these words is beautiful and sad.
Clever--marrying the landscape to her feelings. "black to gray...whisper low, sad sounds..." and on, all of it mirrors that final line. Excellent write, Marianne. Somber.
Mysterious... would love to see more on this, why she was weeping.
Now this is a wordle with emotional impact. I love the way you used the words to create the setting for her to cry in!
Must add my echo to what has already been said. Good concise writing with the landscape mirroring her emotional state.
Elizabeth
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Beautiful, Marianne. Nicely written piece.
Pamela
very good, and as the others, I like the compactness very much
Beautifully done.
Anna :o]
beautiful imagery and emotion evoking poetry....nice work
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